WHAT DO YOU THINK OF THIS LITTLE SHORT STORY??? PLEASE I WOULD REALLY LIKE SOME OPINIONS!!!?

This is really good!! I loved it! There was a perfect amount of detail and I understood what the main character was feeling. DO NOT KEEP THIS AS A SHORT STORY!!! You should expound on it-make it into something more. From the way it ended, I feel like you have an idea of where it should go. I don't think it's a short story; it sounds more like a beginning to me. Keep writing! I would really like to see where this goes!